Sabtu, 04 April 2015
I'm sorry mam, I'm late to publish my work. At this time, I want to publish some feedbacks as comments for work#2 the other groups. So, this is my feedback :
1. For Group 1
a. Present Tense
- Goverment gives fund
to poor people as a compensation of new oil policy.
For that
sentence, you can add an article for spesific noun “the goverment”
- He goes to
Jakarta to get the better job. (a better)
You can replace “the better” with “a
better” because article “the” is use for “best” (the best).
b. Past Continuous Tense
- Lina
was studying English when her parents were cleaning the house.
You can reclace “when” with “while”
because “when” is use for Past Tense.
Or you can replace “cleaning” with “cleaned” if you want to use “when”.
c. Past Perfect Tense
- Indonesian’s fuel production had dedined
significantly over the years.
I am sorry, I don’t understand about the meaning of that sentence. Especially
about the meaning of “dedined”.
- I had read the book three times in week.
The sentence above is less article “a” (a week).
2. For Group 3
a. Present
Tense
- Indonesia Health Card from the
President's program provides free health insurance for the poor Indonesian.
“Indonesia
Health Card” I think is the spesific noun. So you must use “the” as article for
that noun.
b. Present
Continues Tense
- If you looking for Indonesian rupiah
currency exchange rate today, you can open at www.currency.me.uk/rates/idr-indonesian-rupiah.
The sentence
above is less to be “are” (are looking).
c. Past
Tense
- Jokowi went to Brunnei for the first bilateral
relations visit on last january.
The sentence above is right. But if you
want to write the name of month, you should use capital letter on the first of
the word “January”.
3. For Group 4
a. Present Tense
- I always washes
my face and brushes my teeth before going to bed.
"V+es" is just for subject “he, she, it”. So you did't need
to use V+es when you write that sentence. You must write “wash” and “brush”.
b. Present Continuous Tense
- My
friend are helping me to solve my problem.
The sentence above is less “s” when you write “my
friend”. If you want to use to be “are”, you must write (my friends). Or if you
write “my friend”, you can replice to be “are” with “is”.
c. Past Tense
- He slept too late last night so today he is sleepy in class.
The sentence above is less the article “the”. Because
I think “class” is the specific noun.
d. Past Continuous Tense
- Ina was visiting her grandmother in the village at 2
p.m. 2 days ago.
If you want to write “visit+ing”, you must to write
with double “t” (visitting).
4. For Group 5
a. Simple
Present Tense
- Every month,
Rina and her mother go shopping at sampangan traditional market to buy
some clothes.
The sentence above is right. But if
you want to write the name of place, you must to use the capital letter of the
beginning word “Sampangan”.
b. Past
perfect tense
- The thief
had run away after he got a lot of money from the bank.
Because “he got a lot of money from
the bank” is happen before “the thief had run away”, I think you should use Past Perfect for “he got a lot of money
from the bank” and Past tense for
“the thief had run away” because “the thief had run away” is just happen after
the thief was got a lot of money from the bank and it was finish. So I think
you must write “The thief ran away after he had gotten a lot of money from the
bank”.
c. Past
Continuous Tense
- While a producer was making product, a consumers
were competing to get the product.
I think use article “a” in that sentence is not true.
Because “consumers” in here is not just one and it’s the specific noun. So you
should write “the consumers”.
5. For Group 6
a. Past Continuous Tense
- I was sleeping when my mother was cooking
yesterday.
I think you should
use “while” not “when”, because “when” is use in Past Tense.
6. For Group 7
a. Present Continuous Tense
- She is Listening to music.
The sentence above is true. But when you write “Listening” you don’t need to use a capital letter
of the beginning word (listening).
b. Past Perfect Tense and Past Tense
- I had played football after I exercised.
Because ”played
football” is happen after “I exercise”, so you should use Past Perfect Tense for “ I exercise” and Past Tense for “ played football”. So you should write “ I played
football after I had exercise”.
7. For Group 9
a. Simple
Past Tense
- I bought many clothes to my family.
Using “to” in that sentence I think is not
true. You should use “for” when you want to write “I bought many clothes for my family”
b. Past Perfect and Past Tense
- Fauzy had sent me a email before he called yesterday.
The sentense above not use article “a” when
you write “email”. But you should write “an email”. And also when you write “he
called yesterday”. No object after “called”.
- I known you after I had met with your family.
I'm
sorry I don't know what you meaning with that sentence.
8. For Group 10
a. Present Continuous
- - We are starting promote this product tommorow morning in the Sun
Hotel, so you can prepare everything right now.
The word “tommorow” in that sentence is not
true. The correct word is “tomorrow”.
- Don't go anywhere! our office boy is making some glass of coffee for
us.
You should write “glass+es” because “some”
are plural.
b.Present Tense
- - This annual report is not complete, please check your notes and say to me as
soon as possible. I'm really need this document.
You don’t need “to be” after subject in your sentence.
You must write “i really need this document”
- Networking is very important for our
organization, so we have to have many relation with other company.
Many and other is use to “plural”. So you must add “s”
in your object “relations” and “companies”.
c. Past
tense
- - This product was expired, you have to saw the labels before you bought
it.
After “to” you must use “V1”. So the
correct word is “to see”.
d d. Past Continuous
- I was recording supplies inventory while my partner moved this
car to the parking area.
- He was washing his car while his assistant cleaned his garden.
- Vitta was making some cakes while her mother went to the market.
You only use “while” when you write in Continuous Tense. So in your sentences,
you must to replace “while” with “when” because you write in Past Tense (moved, cleaned, went).
e e. Past Perfect
- Novi had written her job to makes some business plan, she must bring
it to the director tommorow morning as soon as possible.
You must use “bring+s” because in that sentence
you use “she” as your subject.
9. For Group 12
a. Past Perfect Continous Tense
- I had been helping
make a cup cake when my sister called me.
The word “help+ing” in that sentence is a verb which
is following by “to”, so you should write “I had been helping to make.....”.
10. For Group 13
a. Present Continuous Tense
- They are
having dinner with my sister in the seafood restaurants at 7.30
p.m tonight.
The sentence
above is less article “a” when you write “dinner” and also when you write “seafood
restaurants”, you should add “s” in “seafood” not “restaurant”.
b. Simple Past Tense
- We ate delicious snack and played some game last night.
“Some” are plural. So you
must add “s” in your object (games).
c. Past Continuous Tense
- She was
reading a Novel with me in the terrace, when you come here.
After “when” you should use Past Tense. So you must write “came”.
1. Indonesian’s fuel production had dedined significantly over the years.
BalasHapusI am sorry, I don’t understand about the meaning of that sentence. Especially about the meaning of “dedined”.
Andina : I think, the word “dedined” it is error written. Maybe, it is “dedicated”. If the sentence used word “dedicated”. I think the sentence is correct. “Indonesian’s fuel production had dedicated significantly over the years.”
2. - I was recording supplies inventory while my partner moved this car to the parking area.
- He was washing his car while his assistant cleaned his garden.
- Vitta was making some cakes while her mother went to the market.
You only use “while” when you write in Continuous Tense. So in your sentences, you
must to replace “while” with “when” because you write in Past Tense (moved, cleaned, went).
Andina : I agree with you Uswatun. But, for the second sentence, I think, the word “cleaned” change to “cleaning”. Maybe the meaning of the Author is an incident betweeen “washing” and “cleaning” are happen at the same time. So, you should be used conjungtion “while”. ” He was washing his car while his assistant cleaning his garden”.
3. This annual report is not complete, please check your notes and say to me as soon as possible. I'm really need this document.
You don’t need “to be” after subject in your sentence. You must write “i really need this document”
Andina : I agree with your comment Uswatun, but in your feedback there are error written. Used subjek “I” not “i”.
4. She is Listening to music.
The sentence above is true. But when you write “Listening” you don’t need to use a capital
letter of the beginning word (listening).
Andina : I agree with you. But, I think a good sentence, if you must add adverb (time). So, it is will expain when the incident it happen.
Example : “ She is listening to music now.”
5. Every month, Rina and her mother go shopping at sampangan traditional market to buy some clothes. The sentence above is right. But if you want to write the name of place, you must to use the capital letter of the beginning word “Sampangan”.
Andina : I think, the correct sentence "Every month, Rina and her mother go to Sampangan traditional market to buy clothes."
Because that sentence less good, using the word "shopping" a better it disappear and using the word "some clothes" too over, because "clothes" is a part totality about skirt, t-shirt, and shirt etc.
6. Ina was visiting her grandmother in the village at 2 p.m. 2 days ago.
If you want to write “visit+ing”, you must to write with double “t” (visitting).
Andina : Uswatun, you are wrong. The word “visiting” not need double “t” in it written. In dictionary the word “visiting” the written is correct “visiting” not “visitting”.
I think thats all about my feedback and my suggestions for you. If there are many false, I am so sorry Uswatun. Please give your feedback in my work. Thank you :D
Thanks for your feedback Andina. It can help me to correct my work later, because now I know where is my false and it makes me know about my mistake.
HapusThank you :)